Sunday, February 24, 2008

Blog 7 Anger

Today’s going to be a fine day I can’t weight to go hunting with Jack and all of the other kids. Roger had thought to him self. He is sore from sleeping on the ground and smells horrible because the last pig’s guts got on him and he is just not liking it. Roger gets up and goes looking for Jack. “Jack, Jack.” Said Roger said quietly. It was early in the morning and just about every one was asleep. “Jack you there?” said Roger. “What do you want? I’m trying to sleep,” said Jack. “You told me to wake you up early so we can go hunting, remember?” said Roger. “Yes, yes I’m sorry, wake up the other kids were getting a pig today!” said Jack. Roger went to wake up the other boys and they all got ready. “Jack can I ask u something?” said Roger. Jack and him went off to the side and Roger sagely asked Jack about getting of the island. “We will get rescued Roger we will get rescued. Now lets catch us a pig!” Jack said. “Now boys lets try not to get that beste to get into are heads.” Said Jack. Little did Jack no he was later going to make a blunder “Yes sir.” Said the little ones. They all sharpen their sticks and take off into the bush. They head off towards the mountain on the island. “Ok were going to take a quick look on the top of this mountain to see this beste. Its probably covert so keep your eyes open” Said Jack. Roger started to ponder on what he thought was going to happen. They were almost at the top and they decided to split up. I was with Ralph. They heard something and. Smack! A stick hit a pig that wondered up here. It wasn’t dead and it started to go down the hill so everyone went after it. All I saw was an infinite amount of sticks. “I did it. I caught a pig.” Said Jack. “You mean we all caught a pig,” said Ralph. “Yea what ever.” said Jack. Ralph and Jack start to get into a little argument and eventually Jack starts too snivel. It gets annoying. Roger did not like to argue with people and did not like to see people arguing. Honestly Roger thought Jack was very uncompromising. Jack was infuriating after he got in his little argument with Ralph.

2 comments:

NicPic said...

Adam,
I really enjoyed the diolauge that you gave throughout the blog post. I think that the way you add it in, hepls the post flow smoothly together.

But i noticed that you use, "jack said, roger said" maybe you can use something like, exclaimed, replied, shoutted, yelled. just to show how they say it.

Other than that, good job.

Ana said...

Adam, you wrote:

"smells horrible because the last pig’s guts got on him and he is just not liking it."

I really liked this because it was a detail about him that is not important to the story, but helps you create a better image of what he looks like and feels like.

Great job! just check spelling and it is fantastic!
-stazienator